this is homework for miss indipend.
akpakk
After my first reading of your essay, it appears that you have only summarized and lifte parts of the article and have little arguments of your own. However you have structured the paper very well and I can see your topic of why Mary Shelley wrote Frankenstein quite clearly.
As with just about everyone in our class, you did not come up with a creative title (neither did I, so it is quite fine!). Your first sentence, “Frankenstein was written by a young girl.” is not quite the attention grabber that engages the audience. I would explore ways to find a better opening sentence. Further into your introduction, I have become confused. What article are you writing about? You have no mention of the article title or author anywhere in your first paragraph and actually even incorrectly cited it as “Hunter.” Furthermore, it appears you have just lifted sentences from the just the text with not thesis of your own. The thesis statement is critical to the success of your paper and would advise you put one in your introduction paragraph.
Furthermore, you cited wonderful examples from the text but have very little argument of your own. You do an excellent job in your third paragraph explaining Lord Byron challenging everyone but do not explain why. You have great construction of the essay but are missing the points to agree or disagree. Instead you only summarize (quite well though) the article with little of your own input. I would say that the number one suggestion I have is to work on less summarization and more of your own voice in the work However, I think you are on a great start and look forward to your next draft!