EH 1301
Dr. Joshua Fullman
May 20, 2016
Grace
Grace. I is sufficient to save anybody, i. It doesn’t matter what is the color of your skin, what family you were born into, what religion that you are, what status you are in or what your education background you have. If you believe in God the Ffather; , he will extend his Grace unto you, just like he did for Apostle Paul in the bibleBible. Paul had to choose to become a Christian, he was once a sinner that was saved by God’s grace. Paul stared preaching salvation to everyone he came in contact with, he knew that it was by God’s Grace and Mercy that he was still alive. While Paul was preaching he never lost sigh t of what God had done for him (He was Grateful). Paul had an enormous amount of STRENGTH. Often times he would quote say “By the Grace of God I am what I am”. Paul desired to be more like Christ each and every day. Comment by joshuafu:
Doesn’t Jesus claim that no one comes to the Father but through Christ (John 14:6)? Comment by joshuafu:
Your use of commas in these sentences make them run-ons Comment by joshuafu:
This “while” makes the whole sentence a fragment. Comment by joshuafu:
Why is this sentence in parentheses? Comment by joshuafu:
Do not use capital letters in this instance. Comment by joshuafu:
Does he say this more than once? Where? Cite.
Many of us can look at Apostle Paul’s life and see our own life or in the lives our family members. We all have sinned against Christ by doing things that we know wasn’t right. I know that God’s Grace is available to us also, so many times we think that we have done sinned too much to even except accept God’s Grace, that’s not so Christ spirit and his grace is extend to us. The world doesn’t think about how much God loves them and want to change them by his Grace. I often times think of the times when I was out in the world doing my own thing, not serving God. I was Lost. But because of God’s Grace he found me, he showed me just how much he loved me, there were many time. I should have been died and gone, but Grace kept me here. I am forever grateful to Christ for Grace. I speak to my children all the time about the Goodness of Jesus Christ and how it saved me from a world of sin. My life is a testimony of God’s Love and Grace. My prayer is for everybody to except the Grace of Jesus Christ into their hearts before it’s too late, as I look at the signs in the bible. I see that the world is soon to come to an end. No one knows the exact time of day or hour that Jesus Christ is coming back, but we can say that it is real soon. Until his return, I will continue to spread the gospel of Jesus Christ and speak of his Grace& Mercy. I will tell them how important it is to except his Grace now, because it is Gods will for us all to be saved by Grace and not lost out here in this mean, evil, cruel, and corrupted world. In the Book of Romans 5:17, the bible says; For if, by the trespass of the one man, death reigned through that one man, how much more will those who receive God’s abundant provision of Grace and the gift of righteousness reign in life through the one man, Jesus Christ. Comment by joshuafu:
Three or four different sentences in this one. Comment by joshuafu:
I am not going to continue pointing out grammatical errors in the next page, but please be aware that they are there. Comment by joshuafu:
This seems like a tangent. Connect it to your purpose Comment by joshuafu:
Why choose to end with this quote (which needs quotation marks)?
Charlotte,
Much stronger efforts will need to be made on proofreading. It is very difficult for your readers to understand your meaning if they are constantly have to slow down to figure out your sentences. Sentences should facilitate understanding and communicate meaning; they shouldn’t be confusing for readers. Relatedly, I am not sure what either your thesis or organizational pattern is in this paper. What are you trying to prove? How are you structuring your paragraphs to try to prove it? What claim do you want to make in each paragraph, and how do those claims support the thesis? (If you don’t know the answers to these questions, your reader certainly will not).
Spend less time drafting, writing from one idea to the next as if you were freewriting. Spend more time planning, prewriting, brainstorming, and outlining. What is it you want to say to your readers? How are you going to say it?
65/100:D