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5-6 Assignment 2, Milestone 1: Draft

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Do not cut and paste large sections of Wikipedia pages together to create a paper. This is plagiarism. Please aquatint yourself with the consequences thereof. You need to remove all Wikipedia material from this paper, create a central argument that you can defend and support, and use databases from the library to find peer-reviewed resources. Use the “Ask a librarian” feature for help with research and submit to the online writing center for help with organization and proofreading. Do not surf the internet or use Wikipedia under any circumstances.

 

     


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Introduction: Overview
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Provides an overview of the issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Provides an overview of the issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument but contains issues regarding accuracy
Feedback:
This should be a persuasive paper, not an informative paper on the state of road planning and construction
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not provide an overview of the issue being analyzed
Introduction: Thesis
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Composes a thesis that states the argument that will be supported and proven throughout the essay
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Composes a thesis but contains issues related to clarity or relevancy
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not compose a thesis
Feedback:
There doesn't seem to be an arguable thesis.
Body: Intent
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Writes multiple paragraphs that are focused, clearly state their intent, and build the thesis argument
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Writes multiple paragraphs but writing does not build the thesis argument
Feedback:
Very few of the paragraphs are your own--most of this paper is a direct cut and paste from various and uncredited Wikipedia sites. This constitutes plagiarism. Please see the announcement at the beginning of the course concerning plagiarism and the consequences thereof.
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not write multiple paragraphs
Body: Body Paragraphs
Points:
40.5 (30%)
Body paragraphs communicate argument by combining thoughts and ideas with evidence
Points:
30.38 (22.5%)
Body paragraphs communicate argument but do not combine thoughts and ideas with evidence
Feedback:
There are a few credited sources used throughout, though they aren't clearly connected to any argument. See the following for ways to compile a persuasive essay:
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not communicate argument through body paragraphs
Body: Opposing Viewpoints
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints in a way that strengthens the argument
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints but not in a way that strengthens the argument
Feedback:
These really aren't counterarguments to any specific argument built within the paper, though there are some sources credited.
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not address or refute opposing viewpoints
Conclusion: Review
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points of essay
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points but contains issues regarding alignment to the intent of the thesis
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not review claim
Feedback:
Adding several more paragraphs from Wikipedia doesn't constitute a summation of your main points.
Conclusion: Insights
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Articulates insights about argument established through the analysis, following argument logically, referring to key points or quotes used to support argument
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Articulates insights about argument established through the essay, but does not follow argument logically or does not refer to key points or quotes used to support claim
Points:
0 (0%)
Does not articulate insights about argument
Feedback:
There needs to be insight to the argument given here as well as an emphasis on concluding evidence.
Articulation of Response
Points:
13.5 (10%)
Submission has no major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization
Points:
10.13 (7.5%)
Submission has major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that negatively impact readability and articulation of main ideas
Feedback:
Format according to APA standards. You need to proofread the text that is your own for usage (their/there), fragments, and agreement.
Points:
0 (0%)
Submission has critical errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that prevent understanding of ideas
Raw Total: 70.88 (of 135.0)

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